This is a Google Drive link to my draft: Life's Moments
It is still in PPT form and some of the slides will have further narration.
This is a Voice Thread Link : Life's Moments
I will likely finish this product as full youtube video and welcome comments on what you are missing in this story. I need to fininsh the dialogue for the final slides that bring my project full circle, but tell me what else I'm missing. Thanks!
6 comments:
The best thing about your story is how deeply personal it is, yet you are able to take the personal issues and create life lessons from them. I would like to know more about your accident and the circumstances surrounding it. I don’t think you should change anything, but I do think some information is needed to link the text in the beginning. It seems to jump around a little, and I was confused when first reading. Another good thing about your story is that, by sharing this, you can have a lasting effect on others who are going through similar trials and tribulations. I also like the great photos you share!
**The best thing about your story… I love finally being able to see pictures of your beautiful wife. It was also nice to see a little peek into your life after having known you for the last 3 or so years.
**I would like to know more about…. how you met your wife and how it intertwined around your accident.
**One thing you should think about changing is……smoother transitions between your slides which I'm sure you'll do for the final draft. That's why it is called the rough draft.
**Another good thing about your story is….. I loved your elaboration on the broom. I have a handmade one entering my house to for the same reasons. I was excited to see someone else carry the same tradition. You have a really nice story that I can't wait to see the final product of.
What I liked the VERY BEST about your story was slide 7 Courage & Strength.
Can you please add a little more about your wife in slide 3 you talk about your Friendship.
I read your wonderful opening I wanted to hear more about your wife and you starting your journey in this new friendship. But you jumped right into your accident? Can you elaborate on your accident leading to you healing with the process of you jumping the broom this is such a great story.
The best thing about your story is the courage it took for you to make a change. I know personally how hard it is to start over or to take a risk. I enjoyed the unusual way you described your realization and epiphany if you will. I would like to know more about how you met your wife and best friend. One thing you should think about changing is adding some type of audio. Music would help illustrate some emotions.
Another good thing about your story is the sweet moments you have shared with your wife. You are clearly made for each other and the happiness shows in your smiles. Congrats on your life of bliss and your new found adventures.
The best thing about your story is how you told a deep personal story of you changing your life. I would like to know more about your wife and the relationship you had with her before you were married. I don't thing you should change anything. Another good thing about your story is the way you started the story. The first pictures you used made me want to read on.
The best thing about your digital story is that it is a compilation of your life. I would like to know more about how difficult it is for you to be a non traditional student. One thing you should think about changing is… I can’t answer this as this is a rough draft and is still in powerpoint form. Another good thing that I enjoyed about your story was the photo collages that you included in the digital story.
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